There was a young man from lorain that came from a long life. Had his momma and daddy through out this time right. Was blessed born in the 99 life, and this is how he survived soooo.....
He believed in himself through whatever, didn't seem to get it but he was clever.
Didn't know where he was going?? But he flew with the mindset that kept his heart flowing..
He was raised in the steel and experience what it was like to go up.....and down the hill.
He worked for what he got.......and saw greatness unleash once Dave McFarland took him to the top of the stock mart.
He made him shine...sweat,blood and tears started running down the kid's eye.
Dave realized...as thousands of minds zoooom zooooom zoooom past to see what Mr.Mcfarland had in for surprise.
It was a secret to tell..........know one knew if the kid was one with the ball or rosed up from the field
His power wasn't complete ..🔋 as the power of god lifts this young boy,like as if he was an bird flying to its fleet.
It wasn't his fault.........as the grace of god tatted him with #33🏈.
Keep grinding bro you can do whatever you put your mind to
ReplyDeleteMan, your poem means a lot. Keep chasing that dream Los.
ReplyDeleteI like all your rhyming, good job.
ReplyDeleteAyeeeee you have a rap career boy keep workin on that field you d1 nephew you gone go somewhere I like the way you explained football
ReplyDeleteOk ok. I liked it, it flowed like a rap and really went with what you had to write about.
ReplyDeleteGood poem keep that spirit up.
ReplyDeleteNice poem I liked your rhyme scheme and your onomatopoeia were pretty. Your pic was a bit weird............
ReplyDeleteOkay Carlos ! You raw ! Good job your poem great !
ReplyDeleteThat poem was nicely done. It sounded great and a had of lot of good uses with your poetic devices
ReplyDeleteCool poem 😎
ReplyDeleteCarlos,
ReplyDeleteAmazing! I like how you made some references to some key points in your life (steel).
I like how you used the third person to describe yourself from what you think other people see you as.
ReplyDeleteOk I see you and I liked how you made your poem rhyme.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you said 33 was tatted on you
ReplyDeleteNice picture, great poem I really like how you put sweat blood and tears great quote
ReplyDeleteI like how you made references to your life.
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